对许多我国托福考生来说，写作实践上是个翻译进程，如何把思维中的中文转化成实际中的英文是托福基础写作最关怀的疑问，也是学生们首要大约处置的疑问。学生们只需把高质量的基础砖瓦填充到精心方案的逻辑规划中，才干建立成究竟的托福高分作文!

语句完满，用词到位，分数天然就会高，可是咱们的学生受思维定式的影响，一般在新托福写作中运用的是我国式英语，

英语和汉语表达有差异，假定在新托福写作中套汉语思维，就是中式化英语的体现。这只能使文章言语糟糕、冗赘。所以考生在平常阅览英语材料和操练写作时，要留心英语表达和汉语表达的不一样，切忌在托福写作中硬套汉语思维。

1、Original: If we agree to say that school offers us the best bookknowledge acquisition then our society offers us the best surviving techniquesin a hard way.

Revised: If we agree that school offers the best method for the acquisitionof book knowledge, then our society offers us the best method for acquiringcommon sense or “street smarts”.

Agree to say that表达中式化，只需要agree that即可;the best book knowledgeacquisition改为the best method for the acquisition of bookknowledge(学校给咱们供给了获取书本常识的最佳办法)更为恰当 ，相同，后边的the best surviving techniques改为thebest method for acquiring common sense…;加上street marks(街头才智)给文章的托福词汇添加颜色。

2、Original: Th

ey can spend more time studying education and communicationto improve their role as a mother, wifes and daughter.

Revised: They can also decide to spend more time studying, educationthemselves, in order to improve themselves in their roles as mothers, wives anddaughters.

原句中studying education andcommunication的说法中式化，不契合英语的表述，大约为studying，educatingthemselves。除了词语表达，此句中还存在其他疑问，如名词单复数的运用：不是前进他们的人物，而 是前进他们本身以扮演好母亲人物。

还有，女人不止一自个。许多人都在扮演母亲人物，role和mother使用复数，故将improve their role as amother改为improve themselves in their roles as mother;相同，为坚持共同，wife和daughter也可用复数，原文中wife的复数写法有误，大约是wives。

3、Original：If you can get the point of communication by watching TV，willyou…?

Revised：If one can learn about communicating from television，willyou…?

原句的get the point of communication by watchingTV表达不清，让人难以了解，大约是指“从电视上学习交际”：learn about communicating from television.

看到这些考生们必定晓得自个错在哪里了，同学们操练新托福写作时应多听一些外国本乡的英语文章， 在托福写作考试中避免这样的差错呈现。